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Experiments gone wrong: Tokyo Shadows

Last time around we spoke of experiments gone right but sometimes experiments go wrong. With Tokyo Shadows I wanted to work on a cliché, with a twist, and ended up with a disaster.

Let’s start from the beginning. Oftentimes in crime shows or books, you come across BDSM- practitioners that may or may not be the murderer. In most cases, even if the BDSM person is proven to be innocent, they are still ‘weird’ or crazy. Even in the only ‘good’ BDSM character that I’ve come across on mainstream TV, [spoiler till the end of the paragraph] Lady Heather in CBS’s CSI, she is ‘redeemed’ in the end and she walks away from ‘the lifestyle’.
So I tried to write a thriller story revolving around the BDSM community, for once they are the victims. I had a group of characters that had worked well in short stories and an idea. I knew who the killer was beforehand, too.

To no avail. The thriller part is boring, and the characters flattened out. I could combine two doms and two subs and they would have the same weight in the story. I am not sure exactly where it went wrong, so it is back to the drawing board for me with this. The fun (read as ‘extremely frustrating’) part is that the characters still work outside the main Tokyo Shadows arc, it is the interaction under pressure that makes it all go to hell.

Oh, and the ending was the worst thing I may have ever written. Not kidding, I could just find no way to wrap the whole thing. Urgh.

111,111 Words

I hit a fun number (which is mostly approximate anyway) of words written this year and I thought I’d do a small update of what I have been up to lately. I built a little graphic (click the image for bigger), but part of it is retroactive, and thus the dates vs. words per day might be a bit whoozy before February 15th, as I grabbed the creation date of the file, the final wordcount and divided accordingly. It still can give a general idea of what I’ve been doing.

I’ve talked about Kuraokami already so I won’t go into that. Tokyo Shadows and Shorai are unfinished and will be revisited in another post. Also, the red bars reading “blog” are pretty self-explanatory, I’d say.

The Yuki Onna’s Prey is a short-story follow-up to Hyakki Yagyō set ten years after the original story. While I was writing it, I had a list of yōkai I wanted to use, but I never got an idea to bring the Yuki Onna up, until this. It’s a fun short story.

Some of the short stories can be found around the blog, you can visit the “Read” page for them. This year, I have written eight short stories / flash fiction under 5000 words. It seems that I have been focusing more on medium-length plots.

Blood Moon is a yakuza story (big surprise, I know) short of 30,000 words and that I believe it should be cut at least in 10,000. The real plot length is around 18,000, but was done sort of free-writing and has lots of repetition and awful narrative. However, I believe it can become something good with the appropriate tailoring.

The Gadir Gates, which I aim to finish soon, is about 22,500 and I don’t think it will surpass 25,000-26,000 words. I started this story to write out some frustration about science [geekery]. I think the teaching side became a bit too overboard so I will have to revise that before it is readable too. After I am done, however, I plan to go back to Tokyo Shadows, fix the structure and write the two-and-a-half chapters that I need to wrap it up.

I plan to tackle The Shikigami of Blood this Novembers, let’s see how that works as it still needs a lot of work. I would also try to get somewhere with Shorai, which I’ve started about five times by now XD

ETA: Never mind. My spreadsheet was wrong XD I forgot to add up The Yuki Onna’s Prey to the final count, so the actual number is closer to 117680, and if you count the blog entries (which I don’t, I just graph them XD), the number is 122999. Unless I forgot something else…